Is my story good? what shud i do to make it better ? whats your feed back?

wooooooooooooow. Right. Yeah. Anyway your story has a knd of a sad romance plot thing to it, however you use Jade and Lily way too much. Use pronouns. Also it moves too fast and the whole find the song thing works sometimes but you gotta hit emotion. Also by the time i got there i was bored and really didnt care. by the way please go to my profile and check my story, id like lots of feedback